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Literature
On The Threshold of Creation
Daughter of Hecate,
I was born upon the threshold
of one year and the next:
a tiny earthen creature,
awash in a sea of stars.
Too late did I remember
Capricorn is the goat with
the tail of a fish,
and perhaps my legs were never meant
to tread upon the earth.
I've heard tell
that Saturn is the harshest master,
and will never be satisfied
by words alone.
In the beginning I was sure-footed
as the goat who glitters in stars above me,
ideas sprung full-grown from my head,
as Athena born from Zeus
Too late do I recall
that prophecy foretold,
Zeus' own creation
would surpass even him.
I'm still trying to puzzle out
whether my own creation
will
Literature
Speaking Aloud
I caught a mermaid in a net under the docks when no one else was looking.
She was small, fragile, and her ribs gaped in gills that fluttered uselessly in the open air.
A small necklace made of shells and a skirt of woven seaweed told me she wasn’t a dumb fish. Long, curved, nails told me of her last dinner still snagged between her soft flesh and the protruding claw. A checkerboard scar on the arch of her fins told me my net wasn’t the first she’d swum into.
Her mouth, open and round like a goldfish, told me nothing.
Huge black eyes, blind in the sunlight, flirted meaninglessly around the underside of the pier.
I told h
Literature
Forging Foundations
there is part of me that knows these walls
in the same ways I know
unrequited was the dream I used to tie my strings to,
unrequited was the hope I used to fill myself up,
unrequited is just a word I used to be friends with
because you've crooked your fingers
into the hooks of my jeans
and you've hooked my heart,
dangling, a stranger to safety
learning how to let someone lead--
there is a piece of me that fears these feelings
like I fear insects that sting, like I fear wildfires that rage,
like I fear porcelain dolls
with cracked faces and scarred chests
because so far in this life,
all the beautiful things I've ever held
have come to me brok
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This deviation was featured on 09th of December, 2013 in the Daily Literature Deviations article
6th draft
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Overall Vision Originality Technique Impact...Wow. Okay, before I start, let me just say... WOW.
*Ahem*
Okay, let's begin!
This piece is very mysterious, and that gives it a very elegant fantasy feeling. I love it. You've conveyed the mood of it very well.
The metaphors and similes you used add to that aura that the story gives off. Not many people can successfully write those, but you've done it perfectly.
I see that you used a lot of adjectives. That can be a good thing or a bad thing depending on how much you use them, but in your case, it's definitely a good thing. Sometimes, too many adjectives can be distracting; in your case, it serves to give the story a more majestic feeling. You've used adjectives for more than just description. You've added a whole new aspect to what the story is conveying. Great work!
Overall, this is very well-written and deep. There are no grammatical or spelling errors as far as I can tell.
Not many prologues can get a reader hooked, but it's certainly got me hooked. Wonderful job!