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Comment Before You Favourite by BoffinbraiNCritique please by Metadream
6th draft

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This is NOT part of Fiction's novel. If you would like to read the story itself, please start at Chapter 1. This simply was put up for those who were pestering me about the story before I put it online. It is in NO WAY connected to the actual novel.


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:iconalexthetyger:
alexthetyger Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well done *claps slowly*

This is so amazing I can't even...
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you :aww:
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:iconalexthetyger:
alexthetyger Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I wish I could write like that... but I can't.
I'm going to keep reading. You should get this published.
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Professional Writer
I'm in the process of attempting to get it published! Planning to start sending some queries out in the coming months :)
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alexthetyger Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I tried querying for my last project (it took me 6 years and I'm still not done) and it's pretty tough. I didn't get an agent cause I realized what I had could still use a lot of work.
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Professional Writer
I used to work for a literary agency and I can say it definitely is tough-- but it helps to narrow down what agents are best for your story ahead of time and be really familiar with what they represent and what their personal tastes are (on top of making sure everything is edited, of course!)

I've got a list of some that I think would be good matches for the story, I just need to get all the query letters finalized and finish some editing on the manuscript before I start sending it anywhere, heh.
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alexthetyger Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Finishing editing first is a good idea... Considering what happened to my manuscript
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DorianHarper Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Professional Writer
I've been through about 17 drafts now, so I'm mainly just doing my last re-reads and fixing some minor things that could use cleaning up. Aside from that it's ready, though! 
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InkyRose Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know this isn't part of the novel, but I thought I'd read it any way as I was curious about 'Fiction' in general :)
I love the gothic, poetic tones of this, it reminds me a lot of Keats in the style of the language and of Poe in its content. I would suggest maybe a few less adjectives and metaphors here and there to help with the flow of the text, but apart from that- great! I look forward to reading the first chapter! :)
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Mirrasae Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013   Writer
Beautiful, graceful imagery. It sucks me into a place where I feel I'm bobbing against the surface of something magical and mysterious and haunting. The first line is especially good. I can feel the character behind the words. He speaks to me. The only issue you might face here is that everything is sort of vague, and some readers are frustrated with that sense of 'ghosting'. I don't know if that makes sense, and it may not be an issue at all, but it's something to consider.
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