This is NOT part of Fiction's novel. If you would like to read the story itself, please start at Chapter 1. This simply was put up for those who were pestering me about the story before I put it online. It is in NO WAY connected to the actual novel.
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This is so amazing I can't even...
I'm going to keep reading. You should get this published.
I've got a list of some that I think would be good matches for the story, I just need to get all the query letters finalized and finish some editing on the manuscript before I start sending it anywhere, heh.
I love the gothic, poetic tones of this, it reminds me a lot of Keats in the style of the language and of Poe in its content. I would suggest maybe a few less adjectives and metaphors here and there to help with the flow of the text, but apart from that- great! I look forward to reading the first chapter!
This actually isn't part of the story (the story beings at Chapter 1) but something small I put up prior to the novel since people were pestering me about it.
Thanks anyway though!
A good 'grabber' here.
I must say you really paint with words. I love your metaphores especially, like taken from one of the most famous authors out there. I like the image you want to show us...it's grim but it's also beautiful and it comes up together very smooth and delicate.
I really enjoyed reading this
Thank you! I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading!
I've always been iffy about this prologue and wasn't sure if I was going to actually include it with the novel. Part of me likes it and part of me thinks it could do without. It's so hard deciding what to keep and what to not! I'm happy to hear that you enjoyed, though!
Well, I think you should stay with this prologue and include it on your novel
And thank you I very well may!
This part's actually being taken out of the story, but I kept it up on here for the heck of it
I've come in search of inspiration and answers. How do I possibly interpret this writer's vision, a work of "fiction"? I usually look forward to an artistic challenge and the fever of creative process. This time I'm a little worried. My efforts will be measured by a different standard. This time it will be a matter of life and death.
This prologue really fired up my imagination. I hope to find and capture an image that will complement your words. Would something monochromatic be acceptable? I see something in graphite or in duo-tones of sepia and sanguine conté
Thanks for writing such a stimulating beginning, Dorian.
And whatever you think will work best! I always say that the artist should express their own creativity through what they believe works. I'm absolutely honoured!
Yes, that reminds me that I need to update this with the revised version I wrote based on older critiques I'm so far behind with everything.
I'm debating on whether or not to actually include one (mainly since agents and publishers typically have you cut prologues anyway), but I'll see what happens! I like the idea of having one before the actual first chapter (especially one in Daniel's thoughts), but I'll see!
I'm actually reworking this opening, but I'll have the revised and second version in my journal hopefully in the next few months for readers to decide which version they like better. I'm glad you liked this one, though, and that it drew you into the story!